Wednesday, 5 March 2008

vote 4 the competition!

I am very pleased to inform you that the whole 3B class has been selected as judge for a competition:

some students of the class 4C have written fantastic ghost stories and you should judge them according to your personal opinion.
Please, reply with your preference to:

a) No Place is Safe
b) The Cemetery
c) The Mistery of the Classroom
d) The Revealing mirror

(Obviously, the names are omitted not to influence you)

The 4 stories are the following:

a) No Place is Safe

A beath woke me up, I started to perspire...

little by little the sigh became louder and louder.

I was holding my pillow close to my heart that was beating as fast as it could.

I was hot but I wasn't able to uncover myself.

I was pietrified.

After few minutes I realized that I had to get up from the bed and try to discover what the hell was going on.

I took a big breath and I turned on the light...I went in my leaving-room where I saw a pool of blood.

I couldn't scream because of the shock but I was crying.

I followed the line of blood on the floor and i got in my mother's room but I heard a strong noise behind me:

I turned but I couldn't see anything.

IIturned back and I prolonged my arm in order to turn on the light..........SWISHHHHHHHH...Ponk:

All Dead!



b) The Cemetery.

I am lying down on a field. It’s all dark around me and I feel the wet grass brushing my skin. I realize that my eyes are closed, so I open them slowly.

It’s evening, and the sun is setting down.

«What’s happened? Where am I?» I ask myself.

The last thing I remember is my mum who says «Goodnight, dear» and kisses me before going to sleep.

I manage to raise myself, and I begin to look around. I see a line of cypresses on a hill and a lot of grey tombstones placed in an orderly way that make me think «I’m in a cemetery».

«I must go away from here before the sunset, or it will be too dark… I haven’t time to lose!». So I start running looking for a way out, but suddenly I feel something that blocks my feet on the ground… Two horrible hands that come out from the grass are holding my ankles and I can move myself anymore!

I scream at the top of my voice and I start struggling, but the hands keep on tighten. Then I feel some icy fingers grinding my neck, and I can breathe no more!

After a few seconds the hands loosen the grip, so I take the opportunity to free myself and run away.

I stop only when I’m out of breath, and I sit on the ground… but I don’t make it in time for resting that I’m surrounded by a lot of zombies!

They come closer and closer and I don’t know that to do… So I lie myself with my face on the grass, and I begin to cry loudly.

Then I open my eyes and all of a sudden I realize that I’m not in the cemetery anymore. I feel the pillow under my head and the warm blanket covering me… «Oh my god, this is my bed» I shout. «It was just a nightmare!».


c)THE MYSTERY OF THE CLASSROOM

In my school there is an old old legend about a mysterious classroom, the art-classroom. It is situated under the headmaster-room, near the physical-room. Now it is always closed, but once I heard some keepers talking about it, that is a very incredible scary story.

About 20 years before, a couple of students used to meet in that room every day secretly, since they feared not to be accepted by their families and friends.

The meetings between the girls have been continuing for many months, and their love grew day by day; together they were happy and they thought that nothing would have separated them. A day while they were cuddling, a classmate entered the class and saw them. Initially the girl continued to watch secretly, then understood the situation, came forward with the threat to tell the secret love to everybody.

The girls implored her to keep the secret but the cruel spy decided to talk about this with the teachers and with the classmates.

The frightened girls feared the friend’s and the families’ opinion and decided to die together. So they killed themselves in the same place where their love was born and grown with some poison.

The next day they had been found embraced one another lying down on the floor. The bad girl who pushed them to suicide, caught by remorse, became crazy. During the night she had a terrible nightmare: the ghosts of the two students crying and screaming asked her the reason for which she had revealed their secret.

She was shut in a spectral mad-house for the rest of her life, keeping the secret with herself…

The room, where these terrible and dreadful events were happened, was closed forever, trying to forget this sad love story.

Still today the keepers that clear the hall of the downstairs hear some spooky noise and see shadows by the crack under the door of the art-room. Take care…



d) The Revealing Mirror


One fine day, Odette, a young woman of twenty-five years of age, broke her mirror that she had in her bedroom and so she decided to buy a new one.
While she was walking along the street, she noticed that in the window of an old-fashioned shop there was a fascinating mirror: Odette went into the antique shop and she asked the shopkeeper how much the mirror costed. It was very cheap and so she decided to buy it even if the man hinted at a curse related to the mirror.

At the beginning it was all going well but with the passing of the time she noticed that the mirror altered all the things reflected into it. Odette started to be afraid. She was awfully troubled and frightened for this situation insomuch as she thought to be mad.

Odette, one evening, resolved to cover the scary mirror with a red sheet and she went to bed.
At the night she had a terrible nightmare: an old woman, with a ghost that was turning around her, told her that all the hurts to her family and to other people twenty years before would be come back to her and that the day before she would have had to look into the mirror.
Odette woke up at 6 o'clock and immediately she uncovered the "looking glass" and saw into it. The mirror showed her the disastrous blaze that she caused in her small country when she was a child. She was the only survivor although she remained in coma for five months.

Odette started to tremble and she did a terrible scream. She remembered everything and she became really mad. She stayed to look the mirror for 6 hours without a break. In the end she broke the mirror with a fist and she killed herself with a splinter of glass.

The pernicious mirror recomposed itself and, the day before, it was in a old-fashioned shop again.


26 comments:

LastButNotLeast said...

I like the first one (a) very much. Short sentences, onomatopoeic words...There's a sort of climax too...good story, even if it's the shortest. Actually I like short stories more than long ones, so...good job!!

Anonymous said...

I like the second story very much.
It's very nice interesting and reslistic.....then it's a classic story of zombies!!!Good job

Anonymous said...

For me the best story is a... very realistic and frightening, too. But I liked them all.

Gre said...

I think that the first one is the best, because it's short,very interesting and more realistic!
Very good job!:)

Anonymous said...

The frist one is the best.I like it because it's short but very realistic...I like the story with a tragic final!All stories are good...Alessio Felcioloni

Willy said...

In my opinion, the first (a) is the best because it is well structured, short and......it's really frightening!!..I like stories that leave an aura of mystery....Very good work!

Eilan said...

I think the best is the last.. because.. I don't know.. I like it more then the other.. It tells about somethink that remains.. day after day.. like a curse.. a shadow..
It makes me think to Jumanji.. the game that still return in men's life.. ihih!!

Anonymous said...

I like the second story because it's dark and intersting...Luca

Anonymous said...

I believe that “The Revealing Mirror” is the best. It is frightening and I liked it really much!I don't like realistic stories because I couldn't sleep during the night! kiara p.

Anonymous said...

the first one is the best for me.
it's very realistic and good written.
even if it's the shortest, maybe it's the best 'cause its semplicity.
Congrat. to all!
Jacopo Lupi

Anonymous said...

I like the second one becouse is a good story and the plot is interesting. It' s aclassical horror book's plot.
Gratz to all u =3
PS I'll draw some about it ;D
GiacomoChiostri

Anonymous said...

I don't like very much horror stories but I think that the second stories is the best one because I like zombies!!!daniele nannucci

Anonymous said...

All the stories are very good !
I like too much "the revealing mirror" because is a very suspense and horror story.
And now ..... who will buy in the shop a mirror ?
Niccolò M.

Anonymous said...

I like very much horror stories, specialy zombies stories,so I prefer the second of them.... but also the others stories were frightening and well written!
Luigi Becagli

keating-johnny said...

Well, well.....if me the third is the best. There are romantic elements, discrimination and a gothic umorism too (that room exist, really XD).
I didn't like the first one because it wasn't much clear; good at the beginning, but there is't any sort of explanation.
The second story was too much classic and not very frightening.
And about the forth one, well... i think i've already read a story very similar to this.
Sorry for critics....those are very good works after all. Keep on writing!

Anonymous said...

Good evening horror' friends.
I like very much the first story 'cause it' s the most macabre despite it' s the shortest.
So good luck everybody.

Anonymous said...

Sorry I'm D. Cicalini. I forget it!!!!!!!!!!!

Anonymous said...

I think that the best story is the second. I very like it, especially the part where there are the hands of the zombies. And I like it because is the only with a good end too.

Lorenzo Villani

Anonymous said...

In my opinion the best story is the first, "No Place is Safe". Even if it is a short story, it is very exciting and riveting especially the final part , where the boy die.


Pietro Carraresi

Anonymous said...

I think that the third story is the best,"The Mistery of the classrooms",even though it is a bit sad!
Beatrice Lanni

Anonymous said...

I like very much"The mystery of the classroom", because it isn't the classical horror story, but it is original and interesting!!
Marta Rossi

Anonymous said...

I agree with Beatrice and Marta: I like the third story!
I think it's the best 'cause it's very topical and it's like a gothic-romantic story!
Giada Funghi

Anonymous said...

I think that the second story, "The cemetery", is the best because it's very frightening but the end isn't dramatic.

federico emo

Anonymous said...

I like very much the last story, "The Revealing Mirror". Because this story tells about a classic object like a mysterious mirror, but it is plugged in a strange and original contest... so, with a simple object, the story results very interesting! Good job!!
Laura Terz0

Anonymous said...

I like the fourth story, "The Revealing Mirror". I like this stoy because there is a mysterious object, a mirror. The story is simple but it is interesting.
Compliments!!!!

=Cosimo Niccoli=

Anonymous said...

I like the fourth story because it's very frightening but also the others stories are interesting so compliments to the writers
sara banfi